Suggestions for my new script

[Aestrius]

[Cade]

im liking it so far, i'm no script writer so i can't really point out flaws or anything o_o

[catgirlatheart]

I love it

[Aestrius]

Thx for the support, I'm glad people like it :).

[Teltroxine]

If you have made the script then I suggest recording it yourself, this will be much more effective if you do it in a calm voice as you trust your own voice so it will probably work better.